Tuesday, January 4, 2011

We spent a lot of time discovering how to write a quality Purpose and Improvement paragraph today. Below are two examples from Noah that we analyzed

Purpose

The purpose of my (name of invention) is to help babies keep their blanket with them at all times. The two loops in the belt make it easy for babies to keep thier favorite blanket and sippy cup with them at all times. As you know, a baby can get very cranky if they don't have their security blanket nearby, so it's important to assist them in keeping this valuable item so close as possible. Also, by keeping the blanket off the floor it helps to prevent germs from getting on the blanket and in the sippy cup. In addition, the ( name of invention) keeps the sippy cup from getting stepped on or tripping someone. Your baby will be happier and healthier with the (name of invention)!

Improvement

My (name of invention) will improve the quality of life by helping a baby stay germ free and become more independent. The (name of invention) will provide the baby with comfort knowing the blanket is close by and within reach. Keeping the blanket off of the ground will keep parents from always having to pick up the blanket for their child. Keeping the blanket off the ground will prevent the spreaad of germs and will help keep the baby healthy. This will help the family save money as they will not need to visit the doctor's office so often. The holder for the sippy cup will also help prevent the spread of germs by preventing the baby from sharing their sippy cup with others. Every parent needs a (name of invention) and so does every daycare facility. Get yours today!